Rough cut of our production

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This is a rough cut of the production so far. It is clear to see that this isn't the finished product due to a number of reasons. 
Firstly, regarding the sound we haven't yet found music that is appropriate to the production and consequently it is filled with all the background noise that was picked up during the filming of the production. There's also the aspect of sound effects that is a necessity to add - this should hopefully help the genre become easier to define and allow more of the conventions of this specific genre to be seen.
Not only this, but the screens where it fades or cuts to black aren't fully black. Unfortunately, they have two white lines on the right hand side of the image. This obviously needs to be changed and edited to a full black screen. 
Another aspect that needs to be edited is the order of the clips. Presently, the clips appear to be quite chronological which is an aspect or convention of any trailer film. Here, it is vital that these are mixed up and put in a more random order. 

There are some aspects that I do like - for example when Rosie slams the door and says 'Leave me alone!'. The match-on-action that is used here is done well, and is a scene that could be used to build up the pace to more of a crescendo. 
Not only this, but the scene when she is running down the alleyway could be used as the final image for the trailer. This could be effective as it can leave the audience wanting more and this could be aided by the sue of a billing block and either a 'coming soon' title or a certain release date. 

Overall, I think it's a good start, but title cards and sound are a necessity that need to be found and added. Not only this, but perhaps the order can be rearranged and sound effects can be added to create more of the conventions typically found in horror films.